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Argumentative: Secondary © WRITE Institute, October 2013
Sample Teacher-Modeled Essay
Educating the World’s Poorest Women:
an Economic, Public Health and Moral Issue
[hook➔]An equivalent to five jetliners of women disappear every day in the
world. In fact, there are more “missing women” today (estimates range between 60 to 120
million) than men killed in all of the wars of the 20
th
century. The low status that women
hold in much of the developing world is largely to blame for these crimes against women.
[claim➔] In their new book, Half the Sky, New York Times reporters, Nicholas Kristof
and Sheryl WuDunn, make a persuasive case for educating the world’s poor women.
[three reasons that support the claim➔] The Pulitzer-Prize winning authors stress that
educating the world’s poor women is an economic, public health and moral issue.
[first supporting point ➔] One reason the authors claim we need to educate
women in developing countries is to foster social stability and economic growth. Experts
Kristof and WuDunn interviewed from the World Bank and global aid organizations
agree that educating women and girls is the best way to fight poverty and extremism.
[opposing viewpoint ➔] Although some people argue that global aid should be
distributed equally among men and women in developing countries, the authors cite that
women who receive small loans, or microloans, almost always spend the money on food,
medicine and housing. As a consequence of education, poor women have fewer and
healthier children. [counterargument➔] Men, on the other hand, frequently spend the
money on alcohol or items that don’t necessarily impact their entire families.
In addition to fostering social stability and economic growth, [second supporting
point➔] educating women also strengthens public health worldwide. With effective
public health systems in place, countries can better respond to public health emergencies
and ongoing diseases, such as HIV/AIDS, SARS, tuberculosis, and malaria. Furthermore,
low-resource countries can prevent diseases better through early detection. [opposing
viewpoint ➔] While some may claim that poor countries should pay for their own
healthcare, [counterargument ➔] clearly controlling the spread of disease is a global
healthcare concern. In fact, the number of children under five who die due to a lack of
vaccines and health care has dropped from by 10 million since the early 1960s.
Not only is educating the world’s poorest women a way to advance economies
and public health systems, but Kristof and WuDunn also argue that [third supporting
point ➔] educating disadvantaged women is a moral necessity. The authors make clear
that the low status that women hold in much of the world is at the heart of this issue.
From beatings to burnings, women’s suffering is not considered real news. “When
100,000 girls were kidnapped and trafficked into brothels [in China], we didn’t even
consider it news,” they explain. [opposing viewpoint ➔ ] Although it is easy to become
numb to enormous numbers, [counterargument ➔] it is difficult to ignore the call to
action that Kristof and WuDunn make. After reading this book, it is simply impossible to
ignore this pressing humanitarian issue.
[restate claim & summarize key points ➔] Educating the world’s poorest
women and girls has huge economic and public health consequences. Most importantly, it
is the right thing to do. According to Kristof and WuDunn, we can all be agents of
change.